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#16 Alis

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Posted 29 September 2021 - 02:28 PM

petition to give isabella multiple hugs and a better boyfriend, or at least have jayden go through some character development :

sign here !!!!!! 

Signed ~Ali

 

Or a petition for Isabella to realize that she's enough on her own and stay single, loving herself ;3


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Posted 30 September 2021 - 09:20 AM

Chapter Four

 

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You guys don't know how happy I feel when you guys comment on or 'like' my story. <33


Edited by luvkeylinn, 20 January 2022 - 12:23 AM.

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Posted 30 September 2021 - 09:31 AM

Oh and here are the main characters :)

 

Isabella Davis

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Jayden Levine

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Zachary Miller

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Piper Thompson

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Maria Diaz

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#19 lilhams~uwu

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Posted 30 September 2021 - 10:46 AM

srtsert i hate creepy guys >:( glad that isabella got out of that situation !!!!

also maria's cute :innocent:


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#20 Alis

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Posted 30 September 2021 - 11:55 AM

I feel like Jayden is the manipulative type, mainly based off the comment he made off her clothes, but he also seems like the kind of guy that would verbally abuse Isabella and then say it was out of "Love". ( Obviously an assumption but that's what he seems like )

 

 

 

 

 

 

Also I see a nEw sHiP sAiLiNg ( Usually i wouldn't ship someone who's already in a relationship, but exceptions exist ;3 )


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Posted 09 October 2021 - 09:43 AM

Chapter Five

 

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I'm so sorry for taking forever to post the next part. Thanks for reading though and sorry for any mistakes :)


Edited by luvkeylinn, 20 January 2022 - 02:55 AM.

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Posted 12 October 2021 - 04:45 AM

Hello :)

 

I was wondering, is there any feedback anyone can give me about this story, whether it be good or bad. I would like to know your thoughts or feelings about whether this story is good or horribly bad. Are the characters interesting and/or realistic so far? What about the story line? Is there anything that needs clarification?

 

I feel like the story is a little boring so far and I'm really sorry. Lack of motivation sucks haha. I also hate how I take forever to post the next part, so that kinda ruins everything and it's easier to forget what happened in the previous chapter. 

 

Anyways, thanks in advance! <3



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Posted 12 October 2021 - 08:07 AM

Hello :)

 

I was wondering, is there any feedback anyone can give me about this story, whether it be good or bad. I would like to know your thoughts or feelings about whether this story is good or horribly bad. Are the characters interesting and/or realistic so far? What about the story line? Is there anything that needs clarification?

 

I feel like the story is a little boring so far and I'm really sorry. Lack of motivation sucks haha. I also hate how I take forever to post the next part, so that kinda ruins everything and it's easier to forget what happened in the previous chapter. 

 

Anyways, thanks in advance! <3

 

Hmmmm, time to think (grabs the other half of my brain). :rotfl:

 

I think it'd be cool if we could see more of Isabella's personality? At least to me, she just seems more of like the protagonist kind of deal, if you get what I mean haha, but that doesn't necessarily mean that she's a bad character, just slightly blander than my taste. Also, this isn't really a 'this story is good or bad' thing, I just noticed that the protagonist always has a best friend who is gay in your stories, which I think is kinda funny haha - but that just might be me thinking it's been done a lot when it's only happened like, maybe twice. To be honest, I don't really know what is going on with the storyline, but that just may be since I haven't read some of the chapters in a while haha.

 

I don't think that the story is necessarily that bad, just because it could always be a little bit better (heck that really applies to all things) doesn't mean that it's not good! I personally think that it is a little predictable, either that or I'm just remembering past stories (oops), but I admit, I am a sucker for stories like this. :laughing:

 

Don't feel too bad about the lack of motivation, Keylin, it happens to everybody! We don't blame you for it. :)

 

I hope I didn't sound too mean at all, but these are my thoughts!! :thumbsup: ;D


Edited by lilhams~uwu, 12 October 2021 - 08:09 AM.

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#24 luvkeylinn

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Posted 12 October 2021 - 10:09 AM

Hmmmm, time to think (grabs the other half of my brain). :rotfl:

 

I think it'd be cool if we could see more of Isabella's personality? At least to me, she just seems more of like the protagonist kind of deal, if you get what I mean haha, but that doesn't necessarily mean that she's a bad character, just slightly blander than my taste. Noted. Okayy thanks! Also, this isn't really a 'this story is good or bad' thing, I just noticed that the protagonist always has a best friend who is gay in your stories, which I think is kinda funny haha - but that just might be me thinking it's been done a lot when it's only happened like, maybe twice. Oh yeah lol. I got a lot of the same ideas/similar characters from my previous unfinished story xD To be honest, I don't really know what is going on with the storyline, but that just may be since I haven't read some of the chapters in a while haha. Yeahh I'm really sorry. Ik I need to make it more interesting hehe.

 

I don't think that the story is necessarily that bad, just because it could always be a little bit better (heck that really applies to all things) doesn't mean that it's not good! I personally think that it is a little predictable, either that or I'm just remembering past stories (oops), but I admit, I am a sucker for stories like this. :laughing:  

 

Don't feel too bad about the lack of motivation, Keylin, it happens to everybody! We don't blame you for it. :)

 

I hope I didn't sound too mean at all, but these are my thoughts!! :thumbsup: ;D  Thank you for your support! Don't worry,  you did not sound mean at all! I really appreciate all the feedback!! thanks again! <33


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Posted 08 November 2021 - 03:03 AM

More

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more

more

more

more

Please?????? <3


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Posted 08 November 2021 - 03:28 AM

MOOOOOOOOOOOOORE. More. More

Is there????
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Posted 08 November 2021 - 09:51 AM

More

more

more

more

more

more

more

Please?????? <3

 

 

MOOOOOOOOOOOOORE. More. More

Is there????

 

I'm still in the process of writing the next chapter. The next chapter will hopefully be posted soon! :)

 

I thought no one was interested in the story anymore haha, but thanks for still being interested! :D


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Posted 12 November 2021 - 11:55 AM

Chapter Six

 

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Just wanted to remind everyone that this story is pg-13. Some bad language/cursing will come out, but it's mostly always censored. If anything triggering happens, I will always add a trigger warning. :)

 

Anyways, thanks for reading <33


Edited by luvkeylinn, 01 March 2022 - 02:38 PM.

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#29 Alis

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Posted 12 November 2021 - 08:40 PM

Jaden I dare you to hurt isabella :-)

 

:)


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Posted 16 November 2021 - 11:04 AM



Jaden I dare you to hurt isabella :-)

 

:)

 

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