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#31 luvkeylinn

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Posted 16 November 2021 - 11:30 AM

Chapter Seven

 

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Posted 16 November 2021 - 11:37 AM

AHHH can you just give her a new BF like just dispose of jayden gently, thx :D 

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Posted 16 November 2021 - 12:00 PM

"TW: Some cursing and yelling"

I LITERALLY JUST SAID 'oh no OH NO' out loud because of you....

especially after what you JUST posted...

i'm scared idk if i should read it... but i'm reading it anyways-

 

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keylin you lovely monster how absolutely dare you i love you AAAAAAAA


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Posted 16 November 2021 - 01:00 PM

Jayden, with all due respect I hope you perish. :goodvibes:


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Posted 16 November 2021 - 01:13 PM

Jayden, with all due respect I hope you perish. :goodvibes:

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Posted 11 December 2021 - 09:28 AM

It's been awhile since I last posted, so some might have forgotten what the last chapter was about so here's a quick summary.

 

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Chapter Eight

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Sorry for any mistakes and I'm sorry for taking forever to post the next part :')

 

Anyways, thanks for reading and I'll probably have the next chapter up by tomorrow or Sunday! :)


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Posted 11 December 2021 - 01:51 PM

Bella sure as <basement> should get character development ( BTW I'm not directing this at Keylin but Bella herself if you get what I mean xD )

 

Because literally every chapter she gets upset over Jayden then forgives him over and over and it seems like she isn't even oblivious to what Jayden's doing. Isabella girl wake up


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Posted 12 December 2021 - 04:39 AM

Can I add some feedback? Bella is a little bland. Maybe you should maybe not let her BF always get away with lots of things? Great story otherwise!
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Posted 12 December 2021 - 07:09 AM

I don't think the problem with Bella being bland is that she's too lenient with her boyfriend being rude - not that it's necessarily *not* bad, I personally do not really like it but I think it's really up to the character development and am personally expecting this to be a story where Bella realizes "<poop> i've been too nice to my prick of a boyfriend" - but that's just my two cents lol. I do agree with the point that Bella stop being so lenient, I'm especially looking forward to when she snaps and realize her self-worth is better than whatever Jayden does. Dude, he's so manipulative. It sucks. At the same time, I do not know what exactly will happen in your story (it might be more of a gradual realization, which may explain why he has been getting away with so much right now) but just mentioning this and hoping that it somewhat makes sense? :laughing: 


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Posted 12 December 2021 - 12:44 PM

Bella sure as <basement> should get character development ( BTW I'm not directing this at Keylin but Bella herself if you get what I mean xD )

 

Because literally every chapter she gets upset over Jayden then forgives him over and over and it seems like she isn't even oblivious to what Jayden's doing. Isabella girl wake up

 

 

Can I add some feedback? Bella is a little bland. Maybe you should maybe not let her BF always get away with lots of things? Great story otherwise!
-BoabTad

 

 

I don't think the problem with Bella being bland is that she's too lenient with her boyfriend being rude - not that it's necessarily *not* bad, I personally do not really like it but I think it's really up to the character development and am personally expecting this to be a story where Bella realizes "<poop> i've been too nice to my prick of a boyfriend" - but that's just my two cents lol. I do agree with the point that Bella stop being so lenient, I'm especially looking forward to when she snaps and realize her self-worth is better than whatever Jayden does. Dude, he's so manipulative. It sucks. At the same time, I do not know what exactly will happen in your story (it might be more of a gradual realization, which may explain why he has been getting away with so much right now) but just mentioning this and hoping that it somewhat makes sense? :laughing:

 

Hello! :) I do realize that Isabella is a little bland, but it's pretty much part of the story and her character development.

 

I know that it seems like the same things keeps happening over and over again, (ex: Jayden hurts/manipulates her, Isabella gets hurt, he tells her "sorry", she forgives him and then later, the repetition occurs again), but it's a little hard for the story to make sense or be more interesting when I'm only posting one chapter at a time :')

 

Isabella and Jayden's relationship is obviously a toxic one with many red flags. And yes, the wise thing that Isabella should do is to obviously break up with her toxic, manipulative, and total prick of a boyfriend, but there's a reason why she's tolerating and being so forgiving to him (for now).

 

Still, I know that it seems like Isabella should have some common sense and that she's a little to "dumb" for her own good, but based on countless stories shared and ones I've personally seen, it's not that easy to just get out of a toxic relationship. And with Isabella's case, it's even more difficult because of the fact that she's carrying her boyfriend's baby. 

 

There are many reasons why people stay in unhealthy relationships and getting out of one can prove to be arduous. We may think that the victim is just too dumb for their own good and that it's easy and simple to just seek help, but it's not. Emotional abuse can have a great toll on a person. A victim can stay in an unhealthy relationship because of the lack of self love they have for themselves, they don't know what true healthy love really is, so they just settle for the very little they are given, they feel like they are obliged to stay in their relationship, etc.. 

 

It's difficult to understand why a person stays in a relationship when they are suffering mentally and/or physically, but I personally think there shouldn't be any judgement. I read about this lady, a victim of domestic abuse, who went back to her abusive boyfriend even after he str**gled her because she relied on him and she didn't want their son to grow up without a father figure in his life. To some people, this sounds foolish, but she constantly lived in fear that her son and her wouldn't be able to survive on their own, just like how her boyfriend told her. It's tough trying to understand what someone else is going through and why they do what they do, but we can atleast try to be more compassionate and do our best to help out some way, without judging their choices.  

 

Anyways, I do appreciate the feedback I receive, so don't stop because I do want to make the story better and enjoyable :D So, if there's any other feedback or questions you have now or later on, just let me know! Thanks for reading!  :goodvibes:  


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Posted 12 December 2021 - 05:19 PM

Hello! :) I do realize that Isabella is a little bland, but it's pretty much part of the story and her character development.

 

I know that it seems like the same things keeps happening over and over again, (ex: Jayden hurts/manipulates her, Isabella gets hurt, he tells her "sorry", she forgives him and then later, the repetition occurs again), but it's a little hard for the story to make sense or be more interesting when I'm only posting one chapter at a time :')

 

Isabella and Jayden's relationship is obviously a toxic one with many red flags. And yes, the wise thing that Isabella should do is to obviously break up with her toxic, manipulative, and total prick of a boyfriend, but there's a reason why she's tolerating and being so forgiving to him (for now).

 

Still, I know that it seems like Isabella should have some common sense and that she's a little to "dumb" for her own good, but based on countless stories shared and ones I've personally seen, it's not that easy to just get out of a toxic relationship. And with Isabella's case, it's even more difficult because of the fact that she's carrying her boyfriend's baby. 

 

There are many reasons why people stay in unhealthy relationships and getting out of one can prove to be arduous. We may think that the victim is just too dumb for their own good and that it's easy and simple to just seek help, but it's not. Emotional abuse can have a great toll on a person. A victim can stay in an unhealthy relationship because of the lack of self love they have for themselves, they don't know what true healthy love really is, so they just settle for the very little they are given, they feel like they are obliged to stay in their relationship, etc.. 

 

It's difficult to understand why a person stays in a relationship when they are suffering mentally and/or physically, but I personally think there shouldn't be any judgement. I read about this lady, a victim of domestic abuse, who went back to her abusive boyfriend even after he str**gled her because she relied on him and she didn't want their son to grow up without a father figure in his life. To some people, this sounds foolish, but she constantly lived in fear that her son and her wouldn't be able to survive on their own, just like how her boyfriend told her. It's tough trying to understand what someone else is going through and why they do what they do, but we can atleast try to be more compassionate and do our best to help out some way, without judging their choices.  

 

Anyways, I do appreciate the feedback I receive, so don't stop because I do want to make the story better and enjoyable :D So, if there's any other feedback or questions you have now or later on, just let me know! Thanks for reading!  :goodvibes:  

Agreed with everything you said but just wanted to add that I wasn't insulting the story/your character writing skills! I was aware that it's all part of the process ( The process is very, very important because if she one day just wakes up and says hey jayden im dumping you byebye that's just no ) but still I can't help trying to egg her on to realize her worth because its so much more than Jayden treats her as >:(, def wasn't trying to rush you to suddenly give her development or something


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Posted 13 December 2021 - 02:51 AM

Agreed with everything you said but just wanted to add that I wasn't insulting the story/your character writing skills! I was aware that it's all part of the process ( The process is very, very important because if she one day just wakes up and says hey jayden im dumping you byebye that's just no ) but still I can't help trying to egg her on to realize her worth because its so much more than Jayden treats her as >:(, def wasn't trying to rush you to suddenly give her development or something

 

Don't worry Alis! My post wasn't targeted at any of you guys, but rather people in general and how they don't really understand a victim's pov (because yeah let's be honest, it's difficult to comprehend why people sometimes make "dumb" choices in unhealthy relationships). I'm sorry if my post seemed like it was targeted at you or anyone else who reads my story. I do appreciate your input and feedback and I will definitely take everything you guys tell me in consideration! Thanks again for reading my story! :) <3


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Posted 17 December 2021 - 11:54 AM

Chapter Nine

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Yeah I know I said I was going to post last Saturday or Sunday, but life happened like always :') Sorry about the delay 0.0

Here's the next part. Sorry for any mistakes and thanks for reading! <33

And like always if there's any feedback, concerns, comments you have, feel free to let me know! :)


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Posted 17 December 2021 - 12:01 PM

*screams* UGH i love your writing so much keylin you literally exceeded my expectations for this chapter tysm O_O


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Posted 20 January 2022 - 03:42 AM

lmao I haven't posted in a long time and all the followers for this topic got deleted :')

 

I'm working on the next chapter and hopefully I'll post it soon :) Also, I did edit/revise the previous chapters with better grammar and stuff xD

 

I don't know if anyone is still interested in reading this story, but I still want to continue writing since I like how the story is going.

 

So, that's all I want to say, erm yeah. I haven't really been that active on HH, so it feels a little weird posting 0-0


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